Write in full sentences, try and discuss rather than make short staements. Use key terms like 'mainstream'. Explain each section in here - why list some album covers? Talk the reader through what you're doing and why you're doing it. The Bauer Media bit - what's it about? How's it helping you? It makes no sense unless you describe it. If lots of people watch music vids on YouTube then what's it telling us? What sort of demo/psychographic might we be aiming towards??Top Categories by age group - great graph - discuss it!!!Video stats and social class stuff - what are these telling you?? What;'s that vid tell you? Final paragraph...!??
Make the changes!! What are you waiting for?You also need to get all your TA stuff together, not scattered around all over the blog.
Write in full sentences, try and discuss rather than make short staements.
ReplyDeleteUse key terms like 'mainstream'.
Explain each section in here - why list some album covers? Talk the reader through what you're doing and why you're doing it.
The Bauer Media bit - what's it about? How's it helping you? It makes no sense unless you describe it.
If lots of people watch music vids on YouTube then what's it telling us? What sort of demo/psychographic might we be aiming towards??
Top Categories by age group - great graph - discuss it!!!
Video stats and social class stuff - what are these telling you?? What;'s that vid tell you?
Final paragraph...!??
Make the changes!! What are you waiting for?
ReplyDeleteYou also need to get all your TA stuff together, not scattered around all over the blog.